The message of the story "After the Storm" was that no matter how tough the situation is and how hard it is to overcome it, never stop giving up. Even though we go through trials and tribulations, we should never drop our heads but instead keep them lifted high. The intended audience is everyone who has dealt with either a similar situation as his or just people who need to be encouraged in life when things get tough and they don't know what to do. The author made some very good purposeful choices when he told his story. The emotions I felt when I heard this story were just sad emotions and then happy emotions. When I compare this story to the original "After the Storm In Fragments", it just felt different when you read it versus when you listen to it. There's more emotion involved.
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In my essay, it's going to talk about a certain situation in my life where I struggled a lot in my life and things kept getting worse.
1. Sight- We were on the football field during practice. 2. Touch- I was catching the football and lifting weights. 3. Smell- You could smell that 6:30 a.m. winter air and it smelled okay. 4. Taste- I could taste the fog in the air as it was close to the ground. 5. Sound- All you heard was the voice of the coaches and players working hard to become a victorious team. I believe the author's message was about how he was southern and how he didn't care how people talked about him being southern.
For my essay, the way that i crafted my thesis statement was by trying to see if the reader went through anything the author did in the story. When I planned for my essay, I went and read the story, tried to take bits and pieces from it, and try to see how the appeals went into effect. The steps that I went through in writing my essay were trying to come up with a good thesis statement, trying to find facts that were in the story and apply them to my essay, and apply the main 2-3 appeals that were in the story. After my first draft, the changes that I made were to mention more about the audience in the story and to say what kind of audience I thought they were, I took out the fluff words that didn't need to be in the essay, and I took out sentences that talked about me instead of the story. After my second draft, I needed to add appeals in my essay and talk about which ones were applied to the story, I also had to create a better thesis statement and conclusion sentence, and I had to add more evidence in the essay from the story. The revisions I had to face in my essay were the appeals and the evidence. I approached the revisions by pulling up the appeals cheat sheet and I tried my best to compare the different things that were on the appeals sheet to the story and add them to my essay. The evidence was another hard part in trying to approach the revision because I had to go back and look at the story again and try to take pieces of evidence from the story and apply it to my essay. When we did the peer reviews, the comments that my peers made helped me fix my essay a little more because they provided detail that I needed to help me better write my essay. When I peer reviewed my peer's essay, it helped me because I was able to take some of the things that I didn't do in my essay and apply it. The feedback from the student conference helped me out a lot because I was able to understand the essay better and the story and it helped me write more things down in my essay. The advice that I would give myself two weeks ago would be to not stress so much over a paper and that I have helpful resources who can help me become a better writer.
What do I need to do to become a better person in my writing? What are some ways to not be repetitive with the things I write? What are some different writing styles I could use this year to make myself a better writer?
Based on the video, the speaker was very outgoing. He had a goal set for his life and basically did the same thing over and over whenever he had a game. I believe the speaker was talking to me. If I were to just summarize an overall message for this video, it would be to never give up on your dreams or give up on something you like to do even if it doesn’t come out as expected. There were a lot of times where I wanted to give up on my dreams, but I never gave up because I knew that I would be able to achieve it. The purpose of this narrative was to encourage the audience to never give up on anything. The aspect of the video that I found funny was when he would say a celebrity’s name the first time and people laughed then he said it a second time but it wasn’t funny. I found it funny because he thought his joke was funny at first then it just wasn’t funny after the first time. The aspect that I found sad was the part where he had to constantly do the same thing over and over again before his games because it just never changed up.
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